Writing Assessment Review

Today in WGA we are reviewing our writing assessment from terms 1 and 4. We looked at what our rubric score is and saw what we have to improve on. Before we looked at the rubric score we had to reread our writing. The seven things you can score on are our ideas, structure, organisation, vocabulary, sentence, punctuation and spelling. I scored 4 for ideas, 4 for structure, 5 for organisation, 4 for vocabulary, 5 for sentence, 5 for punctuation and 5 for spelling.  

My next steps to getting better at writing would be looking at my structure, vocab and also my ideas. How I will work on my next steps is by looking at some words I can put instead so a word, strengthen my ideas. and also put my sentences in the right paragraph or right place. 

Creative Writing

Today in wga we are doing creative writing. We are following along with the teacher. The photo is of a snowy forest with houses and Christmas decor. It's been a while since we did creative writing with the teacher. Here is my writing and the photo.


As the dark sky blooms the stars of the night start to shine through the tall trees. The light of the house glows making the stars and trees shine more than the sun. As I look around more the snow starts to turn to ice as the trees are filled with snow. The people start to come out of their house, the snow starts falling and the Christmas tree starts to shine. 

The people sit down on the deck in their Christmas outfits. Each of the people has different things on their top and pants, it could be reindeers, snow falling, reefs and maybe Santa with Mrs Claus. A reindeer comes outside with a plate on its back. On the plate, there are cookies and also hot cocoa on the plate.

As the reindeer is going to the people he falls. The people rush to pick up the glass but then some of them get glass in their hands. The people get up and put bandages on their hands. The poor reindeer has hot cocoa all over him.

Most of the people rush to the kitchen to get wet paper towels. The other people run to the reindeer to try to calm him down. Even though he is calm, he is just sitting there waiting for the people to get off him. When the people finally get off him, he gets up and walks to the snow. When he is at the snow, he rolls in it to get the cocoa off him. 

Healthy menu

 Today in health we are finishing off what we started yesterday. In health we looked at healthy eating and our activity was to create a healthy menu for a week. This took a bit because I didn't really know what to put. We also have to put photos on the slideshow of what it is. Here is my work.

B + E

 For the past, around 3-2 weeks in Wānanga we have been doing B+E. B+E means Business and Enterprise. The people in my group are Shanaya, Stella and Alexia. Our CEO is Shanaya. Our business advisor is Mr Taylor. We are selling all different kinds of things. The things we are selling are bottlecap snowman, bookmarks, painted rocks and some lollies. We just thought about what we were going to sell and that is what we came up with. We will sell our product at Hornby High School. The day we are going to sell them is December 1st. There are multiple reasons why we are doing market day. One of the reasons is so we can have EOTC trips and the end of the year. Another reason is so that we can learn how it is to make a business or sell things. There are more reasons why we do market day. I think that it is good we do B+E. The reason why I think that is because we get to interact with other people and also make stuff. I think I am looking forward to seeing what people are selling. I think that the challenging part will be when we make the product. My favourite part will probably be when we are making the sign for our table. Here is a marketing DLO.

Writing

 For the past 3-5 weeks we have been doing writing. We have done lots of different types of writing. So far we have done around 9 different pieces of writing. They all have been different from the others. We also have gone outside with the teacher and she has read us some stories. All of the stories she read us have been different from the others. There are a few pieces of writing that I like. Here is one of the stories I like even though it is not finished. 

Setting: Mount Olympus
It was a calm day on the Mount. All of the demi-gods, goddesses and gods were doing something. Only the best demi-gods, goddesses and gods were on mount Olympus. All of the demi-gods were practising their powers and how it would be like in Asgard. Most of the goddesses were trying to make a new power or a new outfit for battle. Most of the gods and some of the goddesses were in the mountains hall. The reason why most of the gods and some goddesses were in them is that there were so many people intruding on Mount Olympus. Only the strongest gods and goddesses are allowed in the hall. They are trying to make a plan to close the border from Asgard and Gotham. 

Setting: Gotham
In Gotham, there were people trying to get to Mount Olympus except for Mario. Mario was practising his spells. Even though Mario isn’t a goddess or a demi, he still is treated the same. Most of the time he is helping the goddess and demi. He is known as the healer or the nicest person on Gotham. Hundreds of people come to Mario every day to get help from him. Most of the time the reason why all of the demis and goddesses are to get Mario to Mount Olympus. Sometimes the portal opens but not fully for anyone to get in. 

Setting: Gotham and soon it goes to Mount Olympus Sometimes it is big enough to fit a person but it only stays open for 3 seconds. It’s been a long time since that happened so it might happen sooner or later. Then it SUDDENLY happened…. IT OPENED. Mario was sad that he has to leave them but he knows it for the good. When Mario got through to the other side. Mario was stunned by what he can see. Soon after Mario processed what he can see he started walking up the mountain. Mario was still shocked made it to the mount.

Setting: Mount Olympus When Mario was walking up the mountain he started to feel uneasy so he looked behind him. Nothing was there so he continued walking up the mountain. Soon he felt more uneasy so he said one of his spells. The spell he said was to make him see anything that was invisible. After he said that spell he started running. While he was running he looked behind and saw a dragon. The dragon looks like it was made out of air. Then he realised that it was Annabeth’s dragon. 

Setting: Mount Olympus Annabeth is the goddess of air. She is one of the strongest goddesses. She is the 5th strongest goddess. There are only 20 of the strongest gods/goddesses. There are gods for all of the elements. The elements are air, weather, earth/nature, water, fire, light, music/sound, technology and more. There is a power of the key. Most people call the power of key and element even though it is not one. 

100 Word Challenge

 Today in Wānanga we have to do a 100-word challenge. The photo is about a water slide and pools. Here is my work. 

It was a very warm day in Whitehill. Everyone was outside doing something. I was at the pools with my friends and family. There are a lot of people there. My family paid for us to go on the waterslide. There were a lot of people going on the waterslides when we came but now there are not a lot of people going on it. There are 5 different types of pools. There are two big pools outside and 1 small pool outside as well. Inside there is 1 massive pool and 1 small pool. When you go there the place has inflatables. Soon I go on a waterslide with my cousins.

Angles

 Today in maths we had to create a slideshow about different types of angles. There are many different types of angles that we found on the slideshow. On the slideshow, we have to do put pictures of what angle it is on the slide. Here is the slideshow.